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Capt_Naked Panda and Frayzah vs Weil

@Dr.Respect ’s Score
Personality: 15
Story Progression: 16
Combat Prowess: 8
Description: 13
Enjoyable: 15
Post Count: 6
Experience: 2463

The flow of your descriptions weren’t natural imo, especially in that first post. They felt too blunt and clear cut. There wasn’t any smooth flow from adjective to adjective. Got the others playing hide and seek I see lol. I like it. Your descriptions got better the story went on but I would have wished for you to describe the ocean a lot more than you actually did. “zoo escapee” hahaha.

Panda’s Score
Personality: 19
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 5
Description: 18
Enjoyable: 16
Post Count: 5
Experience: 2220

@Frayz ’s Score
Personality: 16
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 5
Description: 16
Enjoyable: 18
Post Count: 5
Experience: 2094

I like the background info you gave in your first post, gives great insight as to what’s going on and why you’re there. I especially like that it’s first person, it’s more refreshing than just some 3rd party narrator talking. I’m a big fan of the first person narrative you had. It was like reading a journal of your adventure. Don’t change it.
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Ice vs. Joby. EPIC RAP BATTLES OF HISTORY

Ice’s Score
Personality: 12
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 0
Description: 2
Enjoyable: 15
Post Count: 6
Experience: 1343


The arena light shined brightly all across the stage. Pointed all into one direction the Light's focused upon Ice, thousands of onlookers and fans waited in suspense for Ice to speak into the Microphone he held. Although, this is quite basic, this is the best description I’ve seen from you before! Good job!

Joby i done heard ur voice losers sound the same
I might pull up on your block no scope this aint a game
I might take all your bounty and your fame and call you a bitch
When you talk you sound gibberish like Lilo and Stitch

Oooh! Ok, ok! I like that. That 3rd and 4th line was pretty good. The rest of your verses were aight. First verse was the best.

@joby ’s Score
Personality: 15
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 0
Description: 12
Enjoyable: 14
Post Count: 5
Experience: 1542

Your first verse had too many words in the 7th and 8th line. Didn’t flow very well imo. You picked up it on that 2nd line. That one was clean.`
 
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Hatz vs WingedClover | Not Canon, Battleground

Participants: @Hatz @WingedClover

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@Captain Khan vs @Emperor Cross
Start of fight : https://thrillerbark.com/threads/catch-me-if-you-can.553/
End of fight : https://thrillerbark.com/threads/catch-me-if-you-can.553/page-2#post-15311
Extra info: Non-cannon . Couldn't catch Me
@Emperor Cross

Personality: 14
Story: 14
Combat Prowess: 13
Description: 14
Enjoyability: 13
Rule Breaks:
Post Count: 11
Experience: 4426


@Captain Khan

Personality: 14
Story: 16
Combat Prowess: 14
Description: 15
Enjoyability: 14
Rule Breaks:
Post Count: 11
Experience: 5075


Comments for both:
It was a simple and short BG, decent story, short combat. Emperor, you might wanna put some more effort into the lengyh of your posts, and describe using tekkai and soru, just not say you use them.

Reviewer EXP: 600
 
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The Fifth Duel: Diverging Point, Part 2

Dabit’s Score
Personality: 18
Story Progression: 17
Combat Prowess: 17
Description: 18
Enjoyability: 19

Experience: 9119

Nero’s Score:
Personality: 18
Story Progression: 16
Combat Prowess: 17
Description: 14
Enjoyability: 18

Experience: 8266

Thoughts: ok. The worst thing about this BG is that the posts were too damn long. Some were fine, but some weren’t. Made me almost wanna quit reading. The next worst negative thing is Oreki, up your description my man. Dabit had to carry the description of thread for the most part. Another thing I didn’t like is that you guys didn’t explain the backstory of Nero and Dabit. Not individual backstory but the reasons for why you guys were with Rei and ended up fighting at the end. I was pretty confused.

Moving on to the positive stuff, first of all, I like both of y’all’s personalities. Oreki, you hardly went deep with Nero but even then, his lack of care with stuff, indifferent, bored attitude was unique in a way, which I liked. Dabit was a fun read. He’s joyful and his music sets him apart and I really liked his music.

Another positive is Miyagi. While she was pretty much filler and didn’t add anything to the story, she was fun filler. I liked the interaction between her and Oreki. I wish to see more of her in more BGs(especially the one between you and I Oreki).

I would have probably given you guys both 20s in enjoyability if your posts weren’t so long.

@Oreki
 
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Sky-FUCKING-peia
Participants: @joby @SkeletonsOfThePast @Meme City @Ranger @Smileyman @Chris Mic @Ali @NardZRIPlol
Hosts: @Larsi @Ziosa
Start: https://thrillerbark.com/threads/skypiea.171/post-2243
End: https://thrillerbark.com/threads/skypiea.171/post-33610
Extra info: Canon Island with a lot of people and posts. We had the time of our lives <3

Post counts(Everyone but Ali eligible for +10%):
Players:
@Smileyman : 29 ||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||||
@Ranger : 24 ||||/||||/||||/||||/||||
@joby : 32 ||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||
@Meme City : 26 ||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/|
@SkeletonsOfThePast : 23 ||||/||||/||||/||||/|||
@Chris Mic : 19||||/||||/||||/||||
nardsss: 3 |||
@Ali : 2 ||

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@Larsi : 57 ||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||||/||
@Ziosa : 14 ||||/||||/||||
 
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@Gintoki
Description: 14
Story progression: 12
Fighting Prowess: 0
Personality: 13
Enjoyability: 13
Post count: 4
EXP: 1175

@Icetime
Description: 12
Story progression: 11
Fighting Prowess: 0
Personality: 11
Enjoyability: 12
Post count: 3
EXP: 753

@Oreki
Description: 14
Story progression: 12
Fighting Prowess: 0
Personality: 14
Enjoyability: 13
Post count: 3
EXP: 903

Didnt really get underway, but that first post is the best I've read from Ice. Rest of you were good too.

Review EXP: 500
 
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Being Reviewed By: @SkeletonsOfThePast
Name of fighters(name and level): Nero ( @Oreki ) Level 31 & Dabit (@Dabit ) Level 31 VS Gambit (@Gambit ) Level 50
Link to start: https://thrillerbark.com/threads/deadly-fortune.252/
Link to end: https://thrillerbark.com/threads/deadly-fortune.252/latest
Extra info: Special Battleground. No deaths. An adventure of friendship and struggle in a country with a dark secret.

@Dabit

Personality: 16
Story: 13
Combat Prowess: 10
Description: 14
Enjoyability: 14
Rule Breaks: 0
Post Count: 27
Experience: 11086
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@Oreki

Personality: 11
Story: 15
Combat Prowess: 8
Description: 14
Enjoyability: 8
Rule Breaks: 0
Post Count: 28
Experience: 9059
Comments:
This was a Doozy, Personality was so so, Nero was kinda flat, just getting mad and dropping some insults. Story was good. You did one hell of a job with the intro and idea. Was sad too see so much of your hard work and ideas kinda fizzle out. things get rushed, lots of assets never used. The story had some odd jumpy progression. Descriptions sometimes were really good to borderline over the top, and other times just seem to lack drag on and not say much. You fought yourself basically for half the story and that's not fun to read. Not only that but you were auto hitting and being auto hit in situations you shouldn't have been. Also lucky writing with just finding a dropped knife and things kinda just working out at the end. You need to really attempt attacks and try to hit, not just do them. You off paneled a TON of kills and i think waay over played stamina.


@Gambit

Personality: 14
Story: 12
Combat Prowess: 10
Description: 13
Enjoyability: 12
Rule Breaks: 1
Post Count: 20
Experience: 7086
Comments:
Personality was ok, a bit rough around the edges. Story Prog. You just basically played along, showed up got there and left. Combat was pretty poor, not only did you auto hit people that were technically only 2 tiers off (not auto hit able) and you were also auto hit by the king when he actually wasn't that much faster stronger (his sword was broken tho). Your attacks lacked some details sometimes and were ok others. Your story telling was a bit convenient imo.. 1st place you walk into is a SHP/Gambit fanboy bar that instantly gave you vital info and helped no questions asked lol. I think you also had some time inconsistencies (it was full blown night time early on and then the sun was just setting at the end (could just be a backwards island) Also you lit up 5x cigars but never really Rp'd smoking them and or putting out the butts ( you puffed like 2x and tossed out one but) lol. Points lost for some ERP and making Larsi sound perverted.

Review EXP: 3 people x 4 pages = 1300 ?
 
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Dabit’s Score
Personality: 14
Story Progression: 10
Combat Prowess: 15
Descriptions: 16
Enjoyability: 15
Post Count: 4

Experience: 1742

Panda’s Score
Personality: 13
Story Progression: 10
Combat Prowess: 14
Descriptions: 13
Enjoyability: 13
Post Count: 4

Experience: 1512
 
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Players: @Hatz & @God_Usopun

Extra info: Duel, Non-canon
 
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@Oreki vs. Dabit



Extra Info: Not canon, incomplete, a player is missing... if you find him please do tell him to come back.
 
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Fighters: @God_Usopun & @Fire Tiger
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Participant: @Frayz
Host: @Oreki
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