Capt_Naked Panda and Frayzah vs Weil
@Dr.Respect ’s Score
Personality: 15
Story Progression: 16
Combat Prowess: 8
Description: 13
Enjoyable: 15
Post Count: 6
Experience: 2463
The flow of your descriptions weren’t natural imo, especially in that first post. They felt too blunt and clear cut. There wasn’t any smooth flow from adjective to adjective. Got the others playing hide and seek I see lol. I like it. Your descriptions got better the story went on but I would have wished for you to describe the ocean a lot more than you actually did. “zoo escapee” hahaha.
Panda’s Score
Personality: 19
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 5
Description: 18
Enjoyable: 16
Post Count: 5
Experience: 2220
@Frayz ’s Score
Personality: 16
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 5
Description: 16
Enjoyable: 18
Post Count: 5
Experience: 2094
I like the background info you gave in your first post, gives great insight as to what’s going on and why you’re there. I especially like that it’s first person, it’s more refreshing than just some 3rd party narrator talking. I’m a big fan of the first person narrative you had. It was like reading a journal of your adventure. Don’t change it.
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Ice vs. Joby. EPIC RAP BATTLES OF HISTORY
Ice’s Score
Personality: 12
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 0
Description: 2
Enjoyable: 15
Post Count: 6
Experience: 1343
The arena light shined brightly all across the stage. Pointed all into one direction the Light's focused upon Ice, thousands of onlookers and fans waited in suspense for Ice to speak into the Microphone he held. Although, this is quite basic, this is the best description I’ve seen from you before! Good job!
Joby i done heard ur voice losers sound the same
I might pull up on your block no scope this aint a game
I might take all your bounty and your fame and call you a bitch
When you talk you sound gibberish like Lilo and Stitch
Oooh! Ok, ok! I like that. That 3rd and 4th line was pretty good. The rest of your verses were aight. First verse was the best.
@joby ’s Score
Personality: 15
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 0
Description: 12
Enjoyable: 14
Post Count: 5
Experience: 1542
Your first verse had too many words in the 7th and 8th line. Didn’t flow very well imo. You picked up it on that 2nd line. That one was clean.`
@Dr.Respect ’s Score
Personality: 15
Story Progression: 16
Combat Prowess: 8
Description: 13
Enjoyable: 15
Post Count: 6
Experience: 2463
The flow of your descriptions weren’t natural imo, especially in that first post. They felt too blunt and clear cut. There wasn’t any smooth flow from adjective to adjective. Got the others playing hide and seek I see lol. I like it. Your descriptions got better the story went on but I would have wished for you to describe the ocean a lot more than you actually did. “zoo escapee” hahaha.
Panda’s Score
Personality: 19
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 5
Description: 18
Enjoyable: 16
Post Count: 5
Experience: 2220
@Frayz ’s Score
Personality: 16
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 5
Description: 16
Enjoyable: 18
Post Count: 5
Experience: 2094
I like the background info you gave in your first post, gives great insight as to what’s going on and why you’re there. I especially like that it’s first person, it’s more refreshing than just some 3rd party narrator talking. I’m a big fan of the first person narrative you had. It was like reading a journal of your adventure. Don’t change it.
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Ice vs. Joby. EPIC RAP BATTLES OF HISTORY
Ice’s Score
Personality: 12
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 0
Description: 2
Enjoyable: 15
Post Count: 6
Experience: 1343
The arena light shined brightly all across the stage. Pointed all into one direction the Light's focused upon Ice, thousands of onlookers and fans waited in suspense for Ice to speak into the Microphone he held. Although, this is quite basic, this is the best description I’ve seen from you before! Good job!
Joby i done heard ur voice losers sound the same
I might pull up on your block no scope this aint a game
I might take all your bounty and your fame and call you a bitch
When you talk you sound gibberish like Lilo and Stitch
Oooh! Ok, ok! I like that. That 3rd and 4th line was pretty good. The rest of your verses were aight. First verse was the best.
@joby ’s Score
Personality: 15
Story Progression: 13
Combat Prowess: 0
Description: 12
Enjoyable: 14
Post Count: 5
Experience: 1542
Your first verse had too many words in the 7th and 8th line. Didn’t flow very well imo. You picked up it on that 2nd line. That one was clean.`
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