Writing Underwater

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Let me tell you a story...
About days gone by...


I feel so alone-
Not a tragedy
I take no sides
And toward me
This strong feeling
Of apology
And suicide, inside,
Paradoxically
On this Earth
Is my only decree.
Navigating numbly
Broken world possibilities
Makes me realize an anxiety.

This isn’t who I want to be...

Youthful ignorance,
Believed faithfully
That I could be...
Wonderfully...
A change in this world
Now I can see
I‘m dishonorably...
Not that person
I set out to be

And all that pain...
Feels in vain.


But I still hold on-
Unreasonably
To this faith
Childlike faith...
Adult eyes can see
What kids can be!
But of the mirror
I look fruitlessly
Maybe it’s
My time to leave...

Let me tells you a story
Of a hopeless fool.

...


I still believe
Under the seas
That prayer
Will save me.

I feel...
Contradiction to my conviction,
Lest God points out this dereliction
My life has no subscription.
Seeing youths on worldly addictions
Only adds to my affliction.
Superstition with untrusting friction
It’s not a given that I’ll listen.

Wisdom with regret
Has become an asset
But to those wronged
Have my debts.
Better yet a duet
Of sleep deprived success
and planned failures.
The ability to overcome
Is the ultimate behavior.

Sleepless nights I can
Accept that.
After all these years of trying
What I truly hate is
Setbacks...
And it’s my fault.
My life is underwater
All I taste is salt.
But to the one I pray to,
I shall exalt.

The gift of life I will not take.
I will fulfill it to the extent intended.
And maybe for this I’m a fool.
But I’d rather be above water.
 
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Nu you didn't tag me. I noticed it though :catsalute:

I really really like this one! The first half reminds me somewhat of feelings I can relate to and also they remind me of some characters of my comic :catsweatcry: well done!
 
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Nu you didn't tag me. I noticed it though :catsalute:

I really really like this one! The first half reminds me somewhat of feelings I can relate to and also they remind me of some characters of my comic :catsweatcry: well done!
Sorry, friend! It had slipped my mind. I’ll remember next time.

You make comics? I’d love to hear about them When possible.
 
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Sorry, friend! It had slipped my mind. I’ll remember next time.

You make comics? I’d love to hear about them When possible.
It's okay, I am glad I noticed that you had a new poem though :D

The link is in my signature as well as in my bio and also here LYBRA
the story is still in its early beginnings though :catsweat:
 
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I like the short lines in this one, almost feels like a rap. Another sad poem, but you're good at them, so I don't mind reading them. :D
 
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